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Untouched

from Jules - Thursday, September 19, 2002
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You took my innocence,
But you cannot touch my idealism.

You took my faith,
But you cannot take my hope.
You took my parents,
But you cannot touch my children.
You took my childhood,
But you cannot steal my youth.
You took my companions,
But you cannot take my friends.
You took my schooling,
But you cannot stop my learning.
You took my confidence,
But you cannot touch my success.
You took my certainty,
But you cannot take my dreams.
You took my body,
But you cannot break my spirit.
You took my words,
But you cannot silence my voice.

Each day is an empty page,
And I hold the pen.

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from Gypsy
Wednesday, December 21, 2005 - 15:35

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Its fucking awesome!!!

i didnt read it when u sent it, actually i just found out about it now but... damn, dont we all need to be reminded of that every so often! Txs for putting it into words!!!
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from out at last
Monday, February 21, 2005 - 13:57

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wow...thats all i can say...wow

well done, that poem gets everything every single overcomer wants to say in the open, and in a few sentences. absolutly moving, rock on
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from Joey
Thursday, January 27, 2005 - 05:52

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Reading this makes me happy in the realization that you are in such a beautiful place. The human spirit is something that they try to portray in films and try to explain and describe to those who have never had the need to access that primal place in their makeup. One of the great things about having been pushed into such an extreme situation is that I know what the human spirit is and that it is alive and well in me for one and realizing that so many others have grabbed ahold of theirs as well leaves me with a sense of hope for the futures of others.

I have to say that after hearing of Ricki's passing I feel shaken. My solid base is held up by but a few pins and this has bent one of those pins. He was like a surreal brother and I always hoped that one day when the old bastard of a father of his had died a suitably slow and painful death that he would take over and right the wrongs. Bathe in the peace that comes in passing brother of mine, The scattered and sketchy rear wall of your mind can now finally be wipped clean and hang from the windows to your soul like ornamental curtains taking pride of place. Joey
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from Dr.4_Shure
Sunday, July 18, 2004 - 19:49

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Brilliant! I've got to forward that.
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from Lance
Sunday, July 18, 2004 - 16:18

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"Each day is an empty page,
And I hold the pen."

If the pen is mightier then the penis.
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From Lance
Sunday, July 18, 2004, 16:21

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oops, I meant to say that the pen is mightier then the penis. A contrast of that stupid sword/penis Mo letter adage.

For those who don't get it.(reply to this comment

from Lance
Sunday, July 18, 2004 - 16:13

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Jules, That was fucking awesome!
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from cmag
Friday, June 25, 2004 - 15:17

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It's such a beautiful poem...
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from Cultinvator
Monday, July 07, 2003 - 02:34

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I like the ending, just remember that you hold the pen, but the ink runs out on it's own. Our true self is greater than our conceived one.
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from Cultinvator
Monday, July 07, 2003 - 02:30

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Even though I've heard some of the lines slightly differently before, you've done good work of making it your own original experience.
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from mex
Monday, March 10, 2003 - 20:13

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One word, Beautiful.


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from Kevin
Friday, March 07, 2003 - 18:53

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Very good......just don't let the ink in your pen dry or run out. Let Christ beyour ink and your pen each day!
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From Joey
Thursday, January 27, 2005, 05:58

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Be your own bloody ink! And keep a firm grip on your own pen. This Christ you speak of has had his go, now stand back and watch real people sort their own shit out.(reply to this comment
From neezy
Monday, March 10, 2003, 19:20

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I know what you mean, sometimes I too wish I could grab christ by the ankles sometimes & proceed to dunk him repeatedly in a big pot of india ink.

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from Heather
Saturday, February 08, 2003 - 19:52

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Touching declaration! I especially love the ending!
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from jo
Saturday, September 21, 2002 - 07:18

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Jules Rules! :)
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From MagicGreenRants
Saturday, September 21, 2002, 07:58

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I'm just wondering if "untouched" is an appropriate title for this poem.(reply to this comment
From Joey
Thursday, January 27, 2005, 06:02

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Damn straight it's an appropriate title! You can rape and pillage the body but you'll never have the soul. The girl has got an awesome sense of personal power, take it with you to the top sister.(reply to this comment
From Craven
Sunday, September 22, 2002, 11:54

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Out of a morbid curiosity, are there any distasteful depths to which you'd not sink?(reply to this comment
from JoeH
Friday, September 20, 2002 - 16:31

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That's really fucking brilliant! Excuse my french, but I think the expletives were appropriate. We have our poet-laureate!
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from monkeyfart
Friday, September 20, 2002 - 09:30

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Jules, positive resolve so beautifully expressed.- Thankyou
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from Albatross
Thursday, September 19, 2002 - 10:34

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Thank you for that Jules. Sadness,poignancy,truth,and more than a little hope. It is now taped to the wall next to my desk.

Daniel
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From Jules
Friday, September 20, 2002, 08:02

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Thanks for the kind words people.
Wow, the wall next to your desk! I guess that's almost as good as making JoeH's cool list. :-P(reply to this comment
From monger
Friday, September 20, 2002, 10:37

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Jules, you're on my "shagadelic baby yeah!" list. :-P(reply to this comment
From Jules
Friday, September 20, 2002, 13:42

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Well now my life is complete. :P(reply to this comment
From monger
Friday, September 20, 2002, 15:38

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Cool! Testimonies from the sheep like that make it all worth it for me.
And yes I luv you too Jules. ;)
Hey, maybe you can add that to your list: "You took my all, but hey monger makes my life complete so who gives a fuck?" :P :P

PS: I luv the lines "You took my certainty, But you cannot take my dreams." Bloody brilliant, Jules. Downright shagnificent!! :)
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from moonmental
Thursday, September 19, 2002 - 10:33

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awesome
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from EyesWideShut
Thursday, September 19, 2002 - 10:16

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Facinating, Jules. What a mind!
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from jpmagero
Thursday, September 19, 2002 - 10:08

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You say it all.
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from Craven doesn't want to log in
Thursday, September 19, 2002 - 09:52

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Outstanding, and I don't often compliment amateur writing.
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from faeriraven
Thursday, September 19, 2002 - 09:49

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Jules, I love it!!
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from Tea
Thursday, September 19, 2002 - 08:33

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Great stuff, Jules! The ending is brilliant.
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