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from AndyH - Friday, July 13, 2007
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Lullaby, you're going to die
All you learn will be a lie
If you die before you wake
You're better off for heavens sake

Your mothers love is paper thin
Your best friends will turn you in
Every thing you try you'll fail
A tragedy, a losers tale

So dream your nightmares, drenched in sweat
A glimpse of hell is all you'll get
And when you wake you'll quickly see
That hell is your reality

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from LaLaLaLaLa
Wednesday, March 12, 2008 - 00:36


Oh AndyH,

This is terribly fitting!
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From Kellynli RIP: Lilith
Sunday, March 16, 2008, 03:23

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“Lulyaby you’re going to die

All you learn will be a lie”

And if you die before you wake

pray now

pray for heaven’s sake

“now i lay me down to sleep

I pray thee lord my soul to keep

if I should die before I wake

I know some one will eat my..

(morning) egg

you know there’ll be no leftover


For heaven’s sake, for heaven’s sake

Oh, your mothers love is wheat thin like rice

throw it on the table twice

slice and deice


risky business rice milk

or powdered?

for the suckling or the suckled

your father?--scum

Got Milk?

Hitler mustache

“So dream your nightmares, drenched in sweat

A glimpse of hell is all you'll get

And when you wake you'll quickly see

That hell is your reality”

So pick your scabs

or cut your wrist

Pluck your hairs

or starve yours waist

sit on your mac top...

or blow... your fucking

lungs out

with smoke

or both

dream a dream and dream it right

havens flames or hells light?

so at lasts there’ll come a day

when hells was there and saved the day? Ha!

drenched in sweat, holds no regrets?

dream as dream and dream it right

plan on a early morning flight

Dream a dream and dream it right

sleep on right through the night

sleep on right through the day

you missed the plane but that’s ok

sleep on child sleep away

your plain just crashed on some far away Bali bay

dream a dream and dream it right

hold your teddy bear tight

you missed your class but that’s alright

-for tonight

and whatever comes & is or isn’t after that


yeah i’m sure

“I’m hiv positve”



Kelly: “I watch the moon explode in my face”

and all I can do is laugh. Ha!(reply to this comment

From AndyH
Wednesday, March 19, 2008, 08:18

I like your version better. (reply to this comment
From Kellynli
Wednesday, March 19, 2008, 12:19


:-) Thanks, I hate it.(reply to this comment

from solemn
Monday, August 06, 2007 - 16:48


Nice, Andy. I like this alot.

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From AndyH
Monday, August 06, 2007, 22:10

Thanks, brother. (reply to this comment
From thatata
Tuesday, August 07, 2007, 04:56


I would like to read more of your poems,songs,or stories.If you got anything new I would love to read it,waiting with anticipation.

I will read it with an open mind...(reply to this comment

From AndyH
Tuesday, August 07, 2007, 08:06

I tend to destroy anything I write immediately after writing it. I'm a very harsh critic. Even this poem I was brave enough to post, I'm not too fond of.(reply to this comment
From thatata
Wednesday, August 08, 2007, 11:11


Well,thats ok.When youre ready to post thats good,I hope sooner then later.Im also definitely a critic on myself,its hard to write,but in my notebook Ive decided to write nonsense,its this blocking that causes a lot of problems.When you think ,then youre damned.

I have to confess that I havent read too much poetry,in the Family when I read that mixture of floweryness and moralism,it turned me off,by this Im not saying that while in the family I wasnt ingrained with there morality,I definitely was to a degree.But I still hated the poetry.

Ive read a bit of Poe,Baudelaire,Rimbaud,and Shakespere,and Haiku poems as well as accidentally read poems.The thing with Baudelaire is that Parisian prowler or Paris Spleen is prose poems,its not really poetry as in the more conventional type; its poetic prose.And Ive read Baudelaires Flowers of Evil which in the French follows some kind of metre,but in English you cant get really to that thing ,so hes been translated in various ways,the translation Ive read is Keith Waldrops,he translates him into versets.And Shakespere, Ill confess Ive only read Hamlet,and I definitely read it for the story not for the poetry.And Rimbaud hes hard to understand,but his first poem in A Season In Hell is so fucking punk,its great,Ive read two of his books his only books,he ,I dont really get him ,but hes got something.

By the way ,this is probally not usefull,but Baudelaire was a big fan of Poe,he was the first one to translate him into French, I think.Baudelaire was a bit of a fuck,he prayed to God everynight or something,and he used Poe as an intercessor,something like that,I read in his journals.

anyways...(reply to this comment

From AndyH
Wednesday, August 08, 2007, 11:35

Well, thank you for your interest. I'm sure I'll post something else eventually.(reply to this comment
From thatata
Wednesday, August 08, 2007, 12:47


By the way I see youre the editer type person for the Heavy Metal section,what is this Heavy Metal?I like Guns n Roses a bit and Hanoi Rocks are kinda fun and Black Sabbath are cool,the Guns n Roses though sorta of almost stole from the Dead Boys,the Dead Boys were a punk band.All that gang act was the act of the Dead Boys.

I almost sort of ,or I do, doubt the intelligence of a Heavy Metal type what is this Heavy Metal?I know Punk is pretty stupid but theres an intelligence in there.

By the way how did you like the illustrious,William Burroughs,Naked Lunch?(reply to this comment

from thatata
Sunday, July 29, 2007 - 10:29


This is a very understandable poem in one way,but in another way what are you really trying to say?Obviously I can only take it through my own mind ,but should it just be taken for what it is?Is it a personal viewpoint of life or an artistic characterization of a type of person.A character that you create but is detached.And can be seen from yourself as something ironic in your more humorous and lucid moments.

Or should it be seen more as a song,a burst of expression.Something a person should not think about,but if it is possible, feel,and if he doesnt feel ,say nothing.

By the way,though my nature is kind of sarcastic,Im saying this because of interest.Interest in other peoples art,yours at this specific moment.

half-sincerly yours,thatata
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From Poetry Critic
Saturday, August 04, 2007, 09:29


Thatata, before asking "What are you really trying to say?", perhaps you could familiarize yourself with the genre. In brief: poetry doesn't always have to make sense to its readers, and sometimes not even to its author.

I think this poem, while not great, definitely shows promise. The structure is disciplined and it is neither pompously verbose nor dramatically concise. In other words, better than most of the poetry seen on this site. (reply to this comment

From thatata
Saturday, August 04, 2007, 12:12


Well,mabye I was just being a shit?About,pompously verbose and dramatically concise,if youre talking about me,I would say that I wasnt exactly writing poetry,and it wasnt even the best of my so-called work.I thought about giving it a try,but I dont consider myself as some kind of great writer,I usually paint,draw,or write songs which you probally wouldnt like.

And since his poetry seemed to make such blatant sense,I wanted to ask him about it.It wasnt stream-of-consciousness or esoteric symbolism.But mabye I was just being a fuck and it should just be taken as a song.

I think Andy as well as some others here do have qualities,and that I can perhaps lern from them,both formal knowledge and perhaps artistic knowledge.I think his poetry has far better structure then any I can write.I think I can learn from him,and from others too.

Still I am a bit fucked.(reply to this comment

From thatata
Saturday, August 04, 2007, 12:14


Hey,am I being too apologetic?(reply to this comment

from Tinaph80
Monday, July 23, 2007 - 20:43


A very heart warming poem! It sort of reminds me of a Marilyn Manson song or something. Nice work there! I do have to say that it is better than some of the poems that I've read on this site, but that doesn't say much. ;)

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From AndyH
Tuesday, July 24, 2007, 08:31


Thank you very much. (reply to this comment

from vix
Saturday, July 14, 2007 - 01:39


Ohhh I like it. The menace in the first line is particularly attractive (although I'm not sure it's meant to sound menacing but for some reason that's how I read it), and the juxtaposition of dark resignation with the traditionally soothing medium of a lullaby is really quite nice. I'm glad you're posting more these days.

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From cheeks
Tuesday, July 17, 2007, 20:44

Oh Vix, I like it too. See I don't hate poetry in general I just hate poetry that doesn't make sense and is not true poetry. Just like modern art, while most people like it I happen the think it's crap.(reply to this comment
From vix
Tuesday, July 17, 2007, 23:38


I knew you didn't hate poetry in general :-)

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From AndyH
Saturday, July 14, 2007, 13:34

Thank you, and yes. That is exactly how it's meant to sound. I'm glad you liked it. (reply to this comment
from madly
Friday, July 13, 2007 - 23:37


I found this very entertaining. I hope you don't find this offensive, but for some reason it made me laugh. Not sure why. Maybe because there is so much truth behind your words and admitting that life is this way is funny to me. It could also be due to the fact that I am messed up in the head or it could simply be the wine. At any rate, I enjoyed it. ;)

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From AndyH
Saturday, July 14, 2007, 13:36

Of course I don't find that offensive, take it however you wish. :)(reply to this comment

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