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from a grain of salt - Sunday, August 13, 2006
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just a quick rant typed this up in like 10 minutes

Gypsy fingers roam

Across flesh on fire

Naked not alone

Erotica binds desire

And as a gaze beyond tangerine skies

Outshining even my reflection in your iridescent eyes

I catch my heart in my throat

And pause to remove my lenses of ozone blue

As what feels like death I note

Is merely deja-vu

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from mia1
Wednesday, September 06, 2006 - 22:50

gypsies are creepy!!!
If I had a gypsys roaming fingers on me I would have to seriously hospitalize myself and check for VD!! as for the rest I'm sure I read it but don't recall much as the gypsies are doing a dance in my head....Dm Am or was it the other way around...aaahhhhhhh!!!!!!!!
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from placebo
Thursday, August 24, 2006 - 06:50

Erotica is a noun not an adjective. "Little sister can't you find another way................."
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From a grain of salt
Thursday, August 24, 2006, 07:33

What's your point,I worded that quite correctly...(reply to this comment
From placebo
Thursday, August 24, 2006, 07:41

uhh my bad(reply to this comment
From solemn
Thursday, August 24, 2006, 08:46

It's ok, I will still be your friend.(reply to this comment
from hmmmmm....
Saturday, August 19, 2006 - 13:33


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From a grain of salt
Saturday, August 19, 2006, 17:57

hmmmmm?(reply to this comment
From Yes hmmmmmmm...
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 11:05

It's a little noise I make when I can't decide how to feel about something. (reply to this comment
From Dissonant
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 11:31


Did you mean "Hmmmmm?"?

Hmmmmm....... just sounds kinda monotone and pointless, like meditation only more boring. Proper punctuation is really the only way to give a sound like "Hmmmmmm" meaning or intent.

I realize this is so stupid I shouldn't even write it, but that’s what makes it so much fun. Wheeeeeeee!!(reply to this comment

From Kitten
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 11:44


I disagree, sort of. I think 'hmmmmm...' quite clearly denotes confusion, ambiguousness or uncertainty of one's opinion or view, whereas 'hmmmmm?' indicates a challenging position, as if one is demanding clarification or qualification.

But hmmmmm... (see, no question mark) I am not sure now.

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From Dissonant
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 11:59


Well I disagree too, I think "Hmmmmmm" suggests comfort, contentment, or even subdued ecstasy while "Hmmmmmm?" insinuates pondering, questioning, and dare I say it, indecision.

You may go now.

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From Kitten
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 12:02


Uh no, that's 'mmmmm', dear.

And actually, *you* may go now!

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From Dissonant
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 12:51


"Hmmmm", "Mmmmm", both are acceptable, as are "Just like that baby", "faster", "Slower", etc..

That is all, run along.(reply to this comment

From Dissonant
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 13:23

Ok, you have my permission to respond.(reply to this comment
From Kitten
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 15:41


Your permission to respond, huh?! Well here's what I think of you and your 'permission':

Hmmmmm, mmmmm hmmmmm, mmm m... m... m..., mmmmm.

Take that, why don't you!

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From Rain Child
Wednesday, August 23, 2006, 19:58

Stop it, you're turning me on(reply to this comment
From Kitten
Thursday, August 24, 2006, 02:03


At least it's not before breakfast this time ;-)

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From solemn
Monday, August 21, 2006, 08:56

Huh? (reply to this comment

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