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smooth words

from Rain Child - Sunday, June 11, 2006
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Smooth-flowing words
That smile

designed to give a glow
Of self-content to you
So that you’d never wonder
Or know
Who I am
Where I’ve been
And how I came to be here now.

I play your game
I laugh
And flatter
And joke
You’d choke
If you
Who I am,
Where I’ve been
Why I learned to play your games
So late
In life
For you innate
But for me
A show
An effort
A distraction
A normal front to suit your tastes

To make you relax
Me, who otherwise
Would find myself
An alien on my own planet
A freak
A victim
The fringe of society
A curiosity

But I smile and glow
So you never know
Or even suspect
(Though sometimes detect
the difference)
I can wrap you up in you
And in the little daily things
Like sports
And the television
And all the stuff
That for you is enough
But for me
Is filled with mystery
And clues to you
So that I can hide again
Behind my brave façade
Behind my normal face
And in the place
I made for me
The me displayed for all to see
The me I wish I was
Or knew
The me that relates to you.

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from Rainy wind
Wednesday, June 21, 2006 - 20:54

Hmm I'm starting to like your poems. Not big on the last few lines though
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From Windy Rain
Friday, June 23, 2006, 10:01

Your critique is meaningless. Put one of your own up here smart ass (I still love you though)(reply to this comment
From always before your rain my soul
Monday, July 03, 2006, 01:02

I have several.......try and find them(reply to this comment
From Rain Child
Monday, July 03, 2006, 01:16

I'll just follow the wind...(reply to this comment
From Sunny Breeze
Friday, June 23, 2006, 11:20

Aren't we cute?(reply to this comment
From Breezy Windy Day
Sunday, June 25, 2006, 01:48

Maybe we were once...I think now we're just pathetic.(reply to this comment
From Gentle Spring Zephyr,
Monday, June 26, 2006, 09:21

There, now we are cute again.(reply to this comment
from AndyH
Thursday, June 15, 2006 - 09:22


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From Rain Child
Friday, June 16, 2006, 01:14

There's an Andy H on Poetry Connection, a forum I sometimes visit. Would that be you, darling?(reply to this comment
From AndyH
Monday, June 19, 2006, 15:27


I cannot tell a lie. It's not me. I can't write poetry for shit, the few times I've tried have been embarrassing failures. Most of the Poetry I read goes over my head, I then I feel stupid and get mad and throw things, so I try to tell myself I hate poetry. So whenever I happen upon a poem that I not only understand, but identify with and find meaning in, it pleases me greatly. Such is your poem.

I will check out poetry forum. Thou shalt have no other AndyH's before me! (reply to this comment

From Rain Child
Tuesday, June 20, 2006, 05:44


You come to the Creative Writing Section, read the poetry, and comment on it. You are therefore a poet in my mind. If you can read it, then you get it, it's as simple as that.

(By the way, I submitted this one at poetry connection, and they weren't too impressed with it. :((reply to this comment

From solemn
Tuesday, June 20, 2006, 08:40

Eh, what do they know? I think it expresses well an all too familiar sentiment.(reply to this comment
From Rain Child
Wednesday, June 21, 2006, 04:41

Coming from a great poet such as yourself, I am gratified.(reply to this comment
From Sorry Andy, I can't help it!
Monday, June 19, 2006, 16:38


Maybe you would be better at it if you weren't writing it for shit.

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From AndyH
Tuesday, June 20, 2006, 06:57


*grudgingly accepts correction(reply to this comment

from celestine
Wednesday, June 14, 2006 - 20:58


Rain Child,

what a beautiful piece of writing which expresses with perfection what my heart and mind has felt. You are truly gifted.

I knew you for many years and would love to be in touch again ... you can email me at

Total admiration and respect for your work!
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From Rain Child
Friday, June 16, 2006, 01:13


Wow, thanks! (I'm blushing)

Actually that poem didn't come out on here the way it was intended- it was supposed to be a visual poem with the positioning of the words adding to the poetry, but the computer just pushed everything to the right.

I'm glad you enjoyed though.

I haven't got a clue who you you could be, so I'll have to e-mail you and find out!(reply to this comment

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