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A drugged appreciation of a Violin Concerto

from Korpesco - Tuesday, May 10, 2005
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An agonised appreciation over the whiney sound of a violin being raped.

His fingers hovered above the strings,
He tapped the hollow wood,
Winding the pegs, hands trembling,
He tuned it as best he could.

A minute passed like an hour,
As silence heightened suspension.
The first staccato notes were sour,
But served to sharpen the tension.

Suddenly full - throated tones escape,…
Along the bottom of sound they scrape.
Then notes arise, dark and shrill,
Pumped by alchemy of fiddle.

As torrents of melody raged and rolled,
He twisted, bended, swayed.
To music savage, uncontrolled ,
It led and he obeyed.

Perfection, fluid, torturous, entire,
And yet the speed increased.
Becoming shriller, faster, higher,
Sound throttled, then released.

The music reaches impossible peaks,
The violin insists… the violin speaks.
Not merely singing, telling a tale,
Fugues of terror, and a funeral wail,

Virtuosity divine, beauty terrible,
Combining logic pure, and feeling.
Driving past the limits of bearable.
I back away, cowering, reeling.

A new element of mockery infects,
Staggering the melody’s beat
Yet syncopation the song perfects,
Now it’s all the more bitter - sweet.

And it screams, it sobs, it sings,
Of horror and of pain.
Of souls rebellion against all things,
And lives lived in vain.

To the surface came my tears,
Hot, wet, throbbing.
And I if I didn’t stop my ears,
I knew I would start sobbing

He was swinging to and fro
As if the violin were a beast,
Stabbing strings with his bow
And still the music never ceased...

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from live_fast-die_young
Monday, August 15, 2005 - 05:51

Actually quite good this. I love how the poem's tempo speeds up with the violin's, where the words tumble out faster & harder building up to the emotional ending. Well done.
I'm not sure if you're looking for literary criticism / comments but if I may offer my could forget the external rhyme! It's too inhibiting in this type of poem where the RHYTHM & CADENCE of the words already make such an impression.
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from mia1
Friday, August 12, 2005 - 15:56

hey just curious but do u write erotic poetry???

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from mia1
Thursday, June 02, 2005 - 19:48

I liked it a lot, you should post more poems.....
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From xolox
Monday, June 06, 2005, 09:55


Yes I agree, it's far above the run of the mill kind of verse you see here. It sweeps the reader away without a trace of inhibition.

Please post more poems.(reply to this comment

from xolox
Tuesday, May 17, 2005 - 13:43

I liked that. Very descriptive.
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From Sharon
Saturday, May 21, 2005, 18:57

That was one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. Thank you.(reply to this comment
From Korpesco
Wednesday, September 19, 2007, 07:30


I'm glad you like it.(reply to this comment

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