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G.I. Voodoo Girl

from dave - Friday, July 25, 2003
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Tuesday morning -July 22, 2003:

1. Come home from work: tired

2. @ 70% of 450,000 Memphis TN residences are without electrical power due to a storm: pissed (http://www.cnn.com/2003/WEATHER/07/23/severe.storms.ap/index.html

3. And what do I do? Pull out the acoustic and in a minute write another piece.








Sitting on the couch
Staring at your picture
Wondering where you are
Are you looking at my picture?

Sitting on the couch
Staring at the clock
I’ve got a dream catcher
It’s hanging on the wall

I haven’t been to work
All week
I haven’t done my chores
I can’t eat

So they took me to this clinic
They told me I wasn’t well
They said I have to be admitted
To try to cure me from your spell

Sitting in this room
I think I’m about to panic
I can’t control these moods
Now I think I would like a sandwich

I’ve got to know what it is that you’ve done to me
Tell me my Voodoo girl, what have you done to me?

©Copyright 2003 by David A. Rugely

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from Joe H
Saturday, July 26, 2003 - 16:44

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Sorry dave, but this stinks. I know we've got people in other sections calling for more positivity, but this song doesn't inspire any from me. I liked some of your other stuff but this one is just sad.
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From dave
Sunday, July 27, 2003, 14:32

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LOL! It makes for good song though. (I hate happy songs). Check out the followin link. I can't sing and the recording sucks, but it'll give you an idea. Later, Dave.

http://www.zerowaitstates.com/noisemaker/noise.html

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From ChrisBadAss
Sunday, August 10, 2003, 17:19

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Dave I'll give you free music lessons...

Check out www.riffinteractive.com too.(reply to this comment

From Jerseygirl
Wednesday, July 30, 2003, 20:10

Average visitor agreement is 1 out of 5(Agree/Disagree?)
Sad songs are the best ones. Who the fuck wants to hear about how happy people are anyways?! Besides, I think you sound a lot like Adam Duritz of the Counting Crows--unique.(reply to this comment
From dave
Tuesday, September 23, 2003, 09:37

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Thanks Jerz!!(reply to this comment
From Joe H
Sunday, July 27, 2003, 21:02

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Okay, the song is tight, but I stand by my original assessment of the lyrics. They're cliched, "you've got me under a spell" oooh, so original! I've done this kind of hackwriting for friends, under the condition that nobody would find out that I had written it, something like "In ways that you can never know, my love for you forever grows..." sentimental bullshit. Maybe I should get a job at Hallmark.

And your voice, while not spectacular, is just as good as the other goofballs I hear on the radio, except that you don't have the luxury of studio enhancement. While we're on the subject of music, what happened to that link PompousJohn posted to his bands mp3.com page?


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