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Getting Through : Creative Writing
Reckless | from Free_Dom_Fighter - Sunday, August 11, 2002
accessed 1238 times Supposed to be about a one-night stand... WE'RE WASTING TIME
You look so fine
Body recline
Reckless delight
FEELINGS THAT FADE
Taken away
End of the day
Ready tonight
REFER BEHIND
All over my spine
Shut your eyes blind
Raise Fahrenheit
SCREAM WITHOUT NOISE
Pleasure and joys
Daydreams and ploys
Start to ignite
PASSION WILL BLEND
As we pretend
There's a happy end
Time will recite
WE'RE NOT NAÏVE
All make-believe
Tomorrow you'll leave
Still lonely at night
DO WHAT YOU, WANT TO DO
Just pretend: Happy end |
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Reader's comments on this article Add a new comment on this article |  from Robert
Saturday, November 02, 2002 - 10:14
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Lovely.
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| from JoeH
Wednesday, August 14, 2002 - 16:22
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That was pretty good! have you experimented with any other meters? tetrameter, pentameter etc. The 3-4 beat lines are a little short and choppy for my taste, but I think your poem pulled it off ok.
Read some Shakespeare, the man practically THOUGHT in Iambic Pentameter. I mainly use tetrameter myself. Variation is nice too, like four beats followed by three (I guess you could call that seven beats)
keep rhyming for Jesus! (just kidding, rhyme for satan or whomever you damn well please!)
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