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Skin

from slash - Thursday, July 19, 2007
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Another bad poem

Your under, inside, all over me
Like a permanent itching
Inside my skin
Its torture being
So close
I can feel
Your breath within
All over my skin

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from good enough to make me itchy
Friday, July 27, 2007 - 14:40

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Skin,
I can’t really give you any constructive criticism cause I’m not really sure how to write myself....(sometimes, people get the exact opposite of what I am trying to say through writing..)
I kinda liked your poem; it reminded me of some I wrote awhile back .....hope you don’t mind me posting them.
---K’ish




Picking at my itchy scab innocently
Knowing full well I will leave a scar
So I leave it hanging—

--torture

Impatient!—Click- Click
End Program-Click Again!
How is the window…still open?

--Re booting


Suffering

Padlocked box--clock
Tick tock-- chicken pox’s
Mocks-- my broken heat



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From cheeks
Saturday, July 28, 2007, 20:08

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If you are going to post your crap on someone else's article, why don't you post your name so we can see which moron you are?(reply to this comment
From because......
Sunday, July 29, 2007, 05:13

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I did post my name....only it keeps changing.... WTF??—giggle....
besides, Slash doesn’t seem to mind....and you posted crap on Slash’s article too—I bet your cheeks are rosy red now that I pinched them—you look soooo adorable -- esp. since, I’m almost sure you don’t always go by “cheeks” --but yeah, I know, I can’t hate you for being pretty.
;-P
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From cheeks
Sunday, July 29, 2007, 20:43

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Freaking moron I didn't post crap poetry on his article. It's like adding a comment to an article with another article. It's rude. I have gone by Cheeks on this site for years now and most people here know who I am by now, at least they know I am in my mean stage. So if you have a problem with MPD perhaps you should take medication. (reply to this comment
From rude?
Sunday, July 29, 2007, 21:05

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LOL- oh, well at least you make me laugh!(reply to this comment
From *sorry...
Friday, July 27, 2007, 14:44

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...i meant to address the above to Slash(reply to this comment
From LOL!
Sunday, July 29, 2007, 05:20

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Please cheeks, laugh a little-- it really does suit you!

P.S I won’t mind, go ahead and mock me if it helps you laugh ;-)

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From Scab picking is gross
Friday, July 27, 2007, 14:56

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Maybe next you could write a poem abotu picking your nose?(reply to this comment

From "metaphor"
Friday, July 27, 2007, 15:37

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Is that word gross for you?
--just wondering (reply to this comment
From maybe.....
Friday, July 27, 2007, 15:09

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I will!
--It’s real enough....everyone does it...including you...Thanks for the idea (I’ll dedicate it to you)
.For a change why not try reading some horror instead of those romance novels....
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from cheeks
Friday, July 27, 2007 - 11:47

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If you knew it was bad why did you post it?
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From slash
Friday, July 27, 2007, 12:31

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I posted it in the hope of getting some constructive criticism.

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from bad peom good enough to make me itchy again
Wednesday, July 25, 2007 - 14:59

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I felt like that.... alittle over a month ago--it was torture!
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