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from cheeks Tuesday, July 17, 2007 - 20:45 (Agree/Disagree?) This one is very good. (reply to this comment)

From vix Tuesday, July 17, 2007, 23:35 (Agree/Disagree?) Yes, it is. (reply to this comment)

from lacy Thursday, June 07, 2007 - 12:53 (Agree/Disagree?) nix, I think this is one of the most heart-wrenching, beautiful poems I have ever read. I lost someone to suicide too and this is very fitting. (reply to this comment)

from rainy Friday, June 01, 2007 - 18:14 (Agree/Disagree?) I loved it Nix. (reply to this comment)

from Nozzushur Thursday, May 31, 2007 - 19:01 (Agree/Disagree?) Is this a parable about us escapers electing "empty dreams"? If so, keep your forgiveness. (reply to this comment)

From nix Friday, June 01, 2007, 13:12 (Agree/Disagree?) No shithead, it's about a lost friend. BTW, I wasn't asking for, or offering, forgiveness. (reply to this comment)

From nix Friday, June 01, 2007, 13:14 (Agree/Disagree?) Nevermind, you are not a shithead. At least it meant something to you. I suppose that's what I like about poetry. (reply to this comment)

From Caputmanurus Friday, June 01, 2007, 21:21 (Agree/Disagree?) Hell, maybe I am a shit-head. This is what I thought when I read: For pride [THE "PRIDE" OF THE BACKSLIDER OR THE OTHERWISE UNYIELDED?] I lay me down to sleep [THE SLEEP OF THE NON-FAMILY?] For once I knew what I would be [YEAH, "HEAVEN'S CHILDREN"] But I have failed my destiny [CUZ I BACKSLID] Forgive me all my empty dreams [JUDAS' COINS, OR "I'M ON THE DOWNGRADE AND I CAN'T FIND THE BREAK!!] Do not remember me dejected [SORRY, PATHETIC SYSTEMITE] Ever fragile, unprotected [AS MANY OF US ARE WHEN WE LEAVE SINCE TF LEAVE US WITH SO LITTLE] We will always be connected [THE HELMET??] This escape I have elected [I COULDN'T HACK IT IN THE "LORD'S ARMY"] I will seek to save me then [ONCE I AM OUT OF THE "ENEMY'S" CONTROL] If I return please know me when [PLEASE RECOGNIZE THIS PRODIGAL CHILD] In Mother, Father, Child or Friend [FORMER LOVED ONE] You see a piece of me again [HACKED UP IN JUDGMENT] (reply to this comment)

From nix Tuesday, June 05, 2007, 14:27 (Agree/Disagree?) Sorry. It was for a friend who took her own life. She never said a thing, but I imagine if she did it might have sounded like this. I wish her better times in her next try at life. (reply to this comment)

From rainy Saturday, June 02, 2007, 06:00 (Agree/Disagree?) Wow. That is amazing. Poetry really does mean something different to every person. to me, (although I knew of course this is my personal interpretation because it's about my life) this is what it means: For pride I lay me down to sleep (the reason I continue on day after day, pride.the reason I go to bed, to get up in the morning, to create a normal life for my son and I) For once I knew what I would be (When I first stepped out in the world it seemed my future was limitless) but I have failed my destiny (never expected it to be so fucking hard and that I would make so many stupid decisions) Forgive me all my empty dreams (I'm beseeching the other part of myself, the part that watches over me and loves me for forgiveness) do not remember me dejected ever fragile, unprotected (this is me now, but not the way I would want to be remembered) we will always be connected (I don't know, this is someone personal to the author. I don't personally feel that way about anyone.) This escape I have elected. (My entire life) the last paragraph indicates to me that the author is going to die and hopefully reappear reincarnated as somebody important in their lost friend's life.(reply to this comment)

From rainy Saturday, June 02, 2007, 06:01 (Agree/Disagree?) actually, reading it again now without my own colouring, the whole thing appears to be a suicide note.(reply to this comment)

From vix Saturday, June 02, 2007, 15:08 (Agree/Disagree?) Yes, poetry can be amazing like that. It meant something completely different to me, but I'd rather keep it for myself. (reply to this comment)

From vix Saturday, June 02, 2007, 03:42 (Agree/Disagree?) ^^^ looks like someone might need to examine whether there is a lingering presence of repressed guilt regarding having left the cult :-) (reply to this comment)

from vix Thursday, May 31, 2007 - 10:43 (Agree/Disagree?) This is beautiful. (reply to this comment)

from Kelly Thursday, May 31, 2007 - 10:07 (Agree/Disagree?) Beautiful..Lovely..."Nice!" :-) (reply to this comment)