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NEON LOVE

from live_fast-die_young - Tuesday, April 25, 2006
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I turn another dark corner
and stop cold,
all shook to the core
to see a girl-child
splashing up a puddle,
my eyes transfixed at her feet
on the wine-coloured liquid
she dances in.

The same puddle I danced in
one-hundred and twenty-six
nights ago.
The same blood-red water
I drowned in
the day she left--
the day I crowned myself mad
and forsaken,
unholy but free.

How has the water flowed here?
How? Does she bleed?
But the child has skipped lightly away
past the next shadowed corner.
Why then is the empty
street bathed in crimson?
My gaze turns upward
to the lonely neon light
advertising cheap love and drink
just past the dingy archway.

Ah, my friends,
I have quaffed that cup long ago
on a night like this
when I should have known better.

The little girl was right:

Dance a little light-hearted while,
then walk away.

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from placebo
Sunday, May 14, 2006 - 07:13

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There's something to ex China culties and a knack for poetry.Nicely done Rosie.
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From live_fast-die_young
Monday, May 15, 2006, 00:15

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Thank you, dear! Do you write yourself, or were you referring to other ex-China persons?(reply to this comment
From placebo
Monday, May 15, 2006, 07:29

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I do, but I was referring more to my siblings. In particular Ana, you can read someo of her stuff here. She's registered as " a grain of salt".(reply to this comment
From Christian
Monday, May 15, 2006, 07:54

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You forgot to mention my poetry placebo. And hey rosie is that you i think i kind of still remember you what you up too these days?(reply to this comment
From placebo
Monday, May 15, 2006, 08:27

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no one's interested in sappy overtures dealing with your significant other. I like poems about railroads, land, judgement day, family, hard times, whiskey, courtship, marriage, adultery, separation, murder, war, prison, rambling, damnation, home, salvation, death, pride, humor, pity, rebellion, patriotism, larceny, determination, tragedy, rowdiness, heartbreak, and love. And Mother. And God."(reply to this comment
From Christian
Tuesday, May 16, 2006, 20:11

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Placebo have you read the poems i posted on this site??? Not one of them is a sappy overture about my significant other in fact not one is sappy go and read them and then come back.(reply to this comment
From placebo
Wednesday, May 17, 2006, 09:22

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I've read them and sappy was the mildest adjective I could find in my vocabulary for your poetic efforts.(reply to this comment
From live_fast-die_young
Monday, May 22, 2006, 08:30

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Ahahahaha...you two!

Christian: I remember you too, although not too clearly. Never listen to other people's opinions of your poetry until after you've published, and don't publish if you don't like other people's opinions of your poetry. But write! It's like yoga for the mind.

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From Jedran
Wednesday, May 24, 2006, 05:28

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which is why I never wrote poetry. Where were you in Taiwan? Forest's edge?(reply to this comment
from vixen
Monday, May 08, 2006 - 03:15

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I liked that very much! You write beautifully. I'd be interested in hearing something about what you were saying with it, if you have time at some point to comment on it. I know what *I* read into it, but it would be great to have a more accurate insight into what concept you had hoped to convey - I tend to project myself onto what I read a little too much, especially when it comes to poetry.
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